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Asylum

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Literature Text

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"pill time"
hide it away like a good girl
all better all better
knife in a bedroom drawer

away away
everyone leave me alone
words words words
no meaning

red blood
wasn't me
blank faces
wasn't me
wasn't me

where am I
white walls
white floors
dark feelings once more

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"pill time"
I wasn't sure where to put this
I'm sure the idea gets across easily
I may make a series (Views of an Asylum life) about insanity

I really would love some feedback on this!
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mvendredi13's avatar
It's AWESOME. I was just seeing if there were any comics about asylums, and I stumbled across your poem. It's great! Although some parts didn't rhyme, it's one of the best!